Thursday, January 3, 2013

Another Attempt

Well I've decided to give writing another shot. No matter what I do, after a while, I criticize any piece I am currently working to the point I completely forget about it and give up on it. Maybe the problem is I never let anybody read anything I write. I'm sure this would be a crucial step in encouraging me to write. 

So... that being said I am posting the following excerpt from a story I am working on. It is very brief and, honestly, I don't know what direction it will take. It's very basic. Any constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated, keeping in mind, it is a very rough draft to the beginning of something that I might actually finish. 

Enjoy and please comment,



"Cigarette smoke poured from his lungs into the thick, foggy winter air as Campbell stared off into the night’s sky. He shuddered under his faux leather coat as he brought his smoke to his lips for another draw. Nothing compared to the flavorful, rich taste of a freshly rolled cigarette in Campbell’s opinion. It was quiet in the parking lot outside of his apartment aside from the flowing ambiance of the freeway noise on the other side of the back wall. The only things visible beyond the barricade were the street lamps and fluorescent exit signs.
Campbell was sighing in realization that there was nothing for him to look forward to now that the holidays are over. He always came down with a case of the winter blues after the holidays. He got caught up in the hype and the promise of spending time with his family only to experience the grand let down when life goes on and prior responsibilities resume. He shakes his thoughts and flicks the glowing red butt of his cigarette into the filthy slush in the gutter. As he turned to walk back upstairs to his apartment in 432 he couldn’t help but linger there for a little longer. Something made him stop and stand in the seven degree weather for just a moment longer. His eyes were fixed on the entrance to the parking lot, nothing was there. He started again toward the stairs up to his place, zipped up his coat, and started his ascent.
Campbell fumbled for his keys in his coat pocket, wrapped his fingers around his apartment key and fidgeted with the lock.
“Piece of shit lock” he muttered irritated under his breath.
Since moving in he filed numerous complaints about his apartment including a roof leak in the kitchen that was impossible to fix apparently; however amongst the filed complaints, Campbell failed to mention the stubborn lock. The lock finally gave way with a clack. Campbell deposited his keys on the hook by the door where they always hung when he wasn’t out of the house. He took his coat off and hung it on the back of the kitchen chair and went to the pantry to start a pot of coffee. Normally he wouldn’t dare drink coffee this late at night but he needed to focus on his work. He was setting himself up to be trapped in between a restful night’s sleep and intense restlessness that is repetitive dream land. Those dreams a person has when they start a new job and spend all day doing a repetitive task and can’t get them out of their mind for one hour of peaceful rest was what he had in store.
Campbell was under intense scrutiny and criticism for his work. For the past several weeks he had been barraged with threats and deadlines for the completion, or progress for that matter, of his latest novel. He was currently working on a piece that Apricot Colony publishing was fronting the bill for. Every phone call he got from the publishing office only proved to escalate the anger and anxiety of his editor, even though he reassured him that progress was being made, a complete fallacy in reality. Campbell constantly made excuses as to why this “progress” hadn’t been mailed in nor had he brought it by the office for review.
“This is your last chance, Campbell. We need to see at least three more chapters by the end of the week or we’ll have to cut you loose.” Alan Frank, his editor, asthmatically coughed this phrase through the other line of the phone in their last conversation, to which Campbell replied with a soft touch of the “end” key on his cell. Alan Frank was a resentful and impatient man. His financial success in the publishing business was merely masking the fact that he is never truly happy.
The warm aroma of French roast filled Campbell’s senses as he realized his coffee had dripped the last drop of hot water into the decanter. He poured himself a cup, black, the way he had his coffee for as long as he could remember. It always reminded him of a rich glass of Irish stout. Maybe that’s why he always enjoyed his coffee with no additives. He fancied himself as quite the beer connoisseur. There was something admirable about craftsmen brewers who did it for the flavor of a finely crafted beer. His favorite memory was that of a beer tasting festival he attended in Chicago with his long time girlfriend, Betty. She had been the burning love of his life. Sipping carefully on his scalding hot cup of bitter delight he made his way to his office.
He fired up his computer and stared at the clock as he waited for it to boot up. It was now just after 10:00 and not a bit of motivation fueled his thought process. He then turned his gaze on the computer screen where he had his latest novel pulled up. Displaying itself meekly back at him was the only sentenced he had drafted,
“Where does mankind go from here?”…."

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